“He was too awkward to be contained, all angles, a mess of elbows and knees, and deceptively strong” 1)he was too awkward to be contained 2)all angles 3)a mess of elbows and knees 1)and deceptively strong “There was a measure to the man in the hooded coat, old stooped body, face framed in monkish cloth,… Continue reading Modifying sentence exercise
dear god of flowers why did you not make me a daisy? was my body destined too much bone and not enough nerve that I could not have instead been a flower. I dress my legs in green pants, if i stand with them straight together and take my glasses off they could look like… Continue reading Forestry
Original: “Consider the origin of the word. I was using his Inuit lore against him, forcing him to respond reasonably, a rare sign of weakness on his part. Todd was a determined thinker who liked to work a fact or an idea to the seventh level of interpretation. He was tall and sprawling, all bony… Continue reading Exercise 2: A comma experiment
I like to drink coffee. I am able to drink substances I know what coffee is The flavor of coffee is enjoyable to my tastebuds I am a person- I exist 3. Bean water good. I enjoy the act of ingesting a coffee flavored beverage. From my own perspective, water filtered through the grounds of… Continue reading Exercise 1
“I wonder what it’s like to move at the speed of thirst; if it’s as fast as lying on the kitchen floor with all the lights off.” -Ocean Vuong This sentence is, I think, incredibly striking. It is only one in a long poem full of striking statements. I have now watched this poem 3… Continue reading The Sentence, Strikes.
“The bathroom door was open and the light was on, and as Haroun watched he saw, silhouetted in the open doorway, a figure almost too astonishing for words. It had an outsize onion for a head and outsize aubergines for legs, and it was holding a toolbox in one hand and what looked like a… Continue reading Subjective Style: Good or Bad?